SEMESTER ASSIGNMENT 2

We live in a time of technology and it's hard not to use them. We have so many possibilities that it becomes hard to stop using your phone, for example, even at night when you actually need to sleep. I was sure that it harms people very much. A few days ago I read an article My life became immeasurably better when I stopped keeping my phone by my bed (Jack Sommers Aug. 25, 2019. Retrieved from: https://www.theguardian.com/lifeandstyle/2019/aug/25/my-life-better-stopped-keeping-phone-by-bed. Date of access: Dec. 21, 2019. Date of publication: Dec. 21, 2019). I was inspired to improve my sleep and my lifestyle in general by not using the phone in the bedroom. In this essay, I want to discuss the advice that the article gives. 

Firstly, try to listen to some soothing sounds such as crackling fire, pouring rain or waves beating ashore instead of checking on your social media before you fall asleep. The author doesn't guarantee that it will help, but you can try. Those noises will help you to calm down and forget about your concerns. You'll probably feel a thousand miles away from home. In this relaxing and soothing atmosphere you won't want to use your phone and come back to your routine life. That's one way of falling asleep without a gadget in tour hands. 

Secondly, you should use a real alarm clock instead of your phone. The thing that is obvious is that it was created to wake people up. When we want to set off the alarm on the phone we usually also spend some time answering e-mails and scrolling on Instagram and it distracts us from the thought that our body is ready for the sleep now. Setting off the alarm clock we understand what for do we do it so we fall asleep faster and consequently get up easier.

The last, but not the least point is that you need to leave your phone outside the bedroom. It's the most difficult rule but I'm sure that it really has an effect. For me, it's very hard to leave my phone alone, it becomes a part of me and it's scary. It should live its own life and it shouldn't influence yours that much. So, let your bedroom stay yours only, don't allow your phone to invade your healthy sleep.

To sum up, it's really important not to give modern technology the right to capture our lives. These little steps definitely will help you to feel better during the day and to soften your addiction to your phone during the night. 

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    Organisation: 4.5 (thesis statement not specific enough)
    Mechanics: 4.8
    Language: 5
    Referencing: 4 (incomplete) check the post in the blog

    Things to consider:
    We live in a time of technology and it's hard not to use them: "technology" is singular here; why "them"?
    The last, but not the least point: no comma + "point" is not necessary; it's just "last but not least"

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